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Whats your opinion? (by Dslaney92)

 Dslaney92 (13)    (32 / M-F / Georgia)
8-Nov-12 5:48 am
Please comment.


And i cry. All night long. Its all i can do to pen this song. I scream out, through the tears. Im realizing my worst fears. So put me out of my pain. My tears fall like rain. Im ready to give up. Ive finally had enough. I cant take anymore. My knees hit the floor. Someone save me before its too late. Before its too late.
So see the agony sketched on my face. Show me out of this morbid place. Dont turn your back on me. Hope is all i want to see. I know where i went wrong. Please save me, before the end of this song

 

 

 
 
 JLaDawn 
8-Nov-12 5:51 am
Great addition!

 

 

 
 
 missCHIE (27)    (31 / F-MF / Philippines)
8-Nov-12 5:52 am
yeah its great in the last part :) bravo

 

 

 
 
 smgangel 
8-Nov-12 5:55 am
Very nice

 

 

 
 
 Dslaney92 (13)    (32 / M-F / Georgia)
8-Nov-12 5:56 am
Thaks. :) got a bunch of these i need to complete

 

 

 
 
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