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The poetry corner. (by Awittyname)

 Awittyname (2)    (35 / M-F / Alabama)
24-Oct-12 5:17 am
Sliding down a winter breeze, she quivers as she comes to me, while holding her as she sleeps, i feel a connection underneath, the skin burning from the inside out, my soul is happy theres no doubt, a constant pull from the chest, makes me a foolish mess, enjoying a fine blind bliss, that leads me into loneliness, cutting me as i heal, numbs the way that i feel, for someone who isnt real, i start second guessing it all, down the road i see a fall, even so i cannot quit, whats the point to all of it, i only hope that i can find, a soul like me who is too kind.

 

 

 
 
 JustMeAndYou77 (17)   (46 / F-M / Florida)
24-Oct-12 5:51 am
omgoodness lord! I love that poem!!! Did you write it? My god that's good.

 

 

 
 
 Awittyname (2)    (35 / M-F / Alabama)
24-Oct-12 3:43 pm
I wrote it about my first relationship.

 

 

 
 
 JustMeAndYou77 (17)   (46 / F-M / Florida)
24-Oct-12 4:38 pm
I wrote it about my first relationship.
Ahh, I see.... Well, I love poetry and that is a good one. You must have really loved or cared for her. It's very deep and even the dark tones are beautiful :) Thanks for sharing it.

 

 

 
 
 Awittyname (2)    (35 / M-F / Alabama)
24-Oct-12 5:03 pm
More along the lines of wasting my time just to leave me in the end just like i knew she would. I truly pitty her, because i know how selfish she really is. My feelings for her are so far gone its almost like i never felt them at all. Its actually the entire story of our relationship. To show how quickly beauty can turn into something horrible. In the end i found who i wasnt so that i could love who i am is what i was thinking about when i wrote it.

 

 

 
 
 JustMeAndYou77 (17)   (46 / F-M / Florida)
24-Oct-12 5:46 pm
Wow....

 

 

 
 
 Awittyname (2)    (35 / M-F / Alabama)
24-Oct-12 6:33 pm
Im a deep thinker what can i say.

 

 

 
 
 JustMeAndYou77 (17)   (46 / F-M / Florida)
24-Oct-12 6:41 pm
Nawww, I like things that make me think on a deeper emotional level :) I did get that from your poem. That there was some turmoil and that the relationship ended but was a renewel of your spirit. I was just wondering a little about the beginning or process of your relationship with her. That's what's so good about poetry it really makes you think and you can come up with all sorts of explanations that only the author knows himself.

 

 

 
 
 Mobifren (2)   (40 / F-MF / Philippines)
27-Oct-12 11:49 am
great poem i like this

 

 

 
 
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