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POEM (open to title suggestions) (by alynn)

 alynn 
20-Jul-12 12:13 am
It took her off guard, by surprise / Not recognizing the boulder pulled before her eyes. / And she slept inside days spent staring into her own mind / Not recalling his face, in the background mists of her mirror. // She built a glass case for you, wrapped in silken cloths; Not allowing the pieces of herself to leak out. / And maybe with this Love, or some "fill-in" canned seed can sprout through tattered pieces / of a long lost soul. // I only felt the kisses you lent; the soft release and sighs rolling off your lips / The sweet mournings of honeysuckle and blinding sun, cuddled up and in afternoon bliss / But somehow I lost you, in my lone red midnight thoughts. // She once numbed her body whole / Taking pieces of broken glass from the rotting parts of herself. / And with one muffled scream and deep sigh, released herself to the fall. / She never felt the blow.

 

 

 
 
 alynn 
20-Jul-12 12:27 am
Sorry if the slashes get on y'alls nerves lol, I can't do that spacing and line skipping from my phone -.-

 

 

 
 
 Andrea661 (7)    (32 / F-M / California)
20-Jul-12 12:32 am
Damn thats amazing

 

 

 
 
 alynn 
20-Jul-12 1:05 am
@Andrea661: Thank you! :)

 

 

 
 
 Blackbird00 (2)    (31 / M-F / Indiana)
20-Jul-12 1:34 am
That is beautiful!

 

 

 
 
 alynn 
20-Jul-12 1:48 am
@Blackbird00: Wow, thanks lol. I appreciate y'all reading :)

 

 

 
 
 brats52005 (52)    (54 / F-M / California)
20-Jul-12 1:56 am
Still writing great stuff. Welcome back

 

 

 
 
 james85 
20-Jul-12 2:32 am
Sorry i cant really give you a title for this lol, but this is really good, good to see you back again!

 

 

 
 
 alynn 
20-Jul-12 3:24 am
@brats52005: Thanks so much :) James: I appreciate the warm welcome, thank you. And that's okay about the title lol. Titles are really hard to come up with. Coming up with a name for a poem is ten times harder than writing the actual poem sometimes lol.

 

 

 
 
 Estarley77 
20-Jul-12 4:21 am
Thats beautiful and the only thing i can think of is the word missing :)

 

 

 
 
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